There is some trouble in the near distance
The assault can be seen coming your way
Eyes are searching for the guilty to blame
Feeling the shame, you deny it away
There have been many mistakes on your part
But the things done are not so worrisome
As admitting it to yourself or others
You rather degrade another to scum
When they aren’t enough you use you own self
The fire of self-deceit grows within
And starts feverishly consuming you
Using who you are to cover its skin
It takes your slightest flaws and grows them tall
And they become martyrs of your failure
You hold yourself liable for nothing
Because you can’t help your human nature
As you stoop lower for any excuse
You start to do what you aimed to avoid
The justifications start to become truths
And confidence crumbles and is destroyed
Troubles on my heart
Erodoing the place they sit
My chest tears apart
I nominate Ector Ward
Erodoing the place they sit
My chest tears apart
I nominate Ector Ward
20 comments:
This is beautiful.
lovely logic on how things fail and more.
well done poem.
Very strong ending.
Well composed.
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That picture is amazing. I'm without words.
honest and raw... great poem!
Wow. Your disgust and anger clearly come through. I hope it had a healing effect.
Strong poem which is strongly written. I like the use of both internal and end rhyme in these lines:
'But the things done are not so worrisome
As admitting it to yourself or others
You rather degrade another to scum'
It's so true how often we have to deal with self loathing when we break the promises we made to ourselves that we swore we'd never break.
The image of the heart stuck with pins and nails is so very powerful, goes perfectly with your words.
very good. cool
Nice work and a very dark truth.
Alcina
honest feelings portrayed,..
awesome sentiments done.
Beautiful picture,and a well crafted poem!! keep up the good work
Just wonderful on many levels.
Picture fits this poem perfectly.
Very Nice Poetry with an amazing Imagination
Great Work of Creativity !! Highly Expressive !!
It was indeed enjoyable after reading this one !!
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some of my Haiku Collections
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and also, on my very recent Work as well
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!!! Happy Rally !!!
Cheers !!
Fitting picture for the poem. Regret does grow into self-loathing and blame. Like mold on a shower, it easily appears and is more difficult to rid. Powerful emotions portrayed.
You've done an exceptional job at articulating your feelings in a way that others can completely relate to your logic.
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with friends like this...who needs drama?
You make your point - Destroying others to support yourself always turns to self-destruction.
Thanks for the reminder.
What a strong ending. I am so happy to read your poem. I am new to the rally and here is what I tried today http://promisingpoetsparkinglot.blogspot.com/2011/08/agreement-for-thursday-poets-rally-week.html
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