I thought I saw something
Glinting in the sunlight
Like an unearthed diamond
Laying there just for me
Glinting in the sunlight
Like an unearthed diamond
Laying there just for me
I thought I saw something
A shadowy figure
Its eyes seeing the fear
Simmering in my heart
A shadowy figure
Its eyes seeing the fear
Simmering in my heart
I thought I saw someone
A familiar face
I longed to see again
Driving their car past me
A familiar face
I longed to see again
Driving their car past me
But things I thought I saw
Out the edge of my sight
Were not there when I looked
But had they ever been there
Out the edge of my sight
Were not there when I looked
But had they ever been there
Or only in my mind?
-1/21/12- Award from the Poetry Palace
Colorful feathers
If I look inside your soul
is there color too?
I nominate: iBeingMe
12 comments:
very nice , it a reality or dream
lovely write, great images
This poem really captures the feeling of things just beyond our grasp. Good job!
Hello.
I like the way you posed the question in the end...filled with doubt, how many times have we asked ourselves that question?
Very nicely penned.
Thanks for sharing.
Harp Of My Soul
I agree with Andy, How many times have we thought something has dance across our eyes. I love the direction of the poem.
http://mrblaque78.wordpress.com/2012/01/11/discarded-without-hopes/
Awesome poem. Is this reality? Or am I dreaming?
Loved reading this one.
Namaste
Lovely written, nice image.
Wonderful Mandy.
How often it happens that we see something in a flash and wonder whether we had seen it at all! You've explored a really good theme. Your poem is also simple and fluid, hence very readable. Well written.
Let me start by saying that you will not be "aspiring" long, as you have such a gift and it will be recognized, I am certain! You are a talented poetess and I have much hope for the future of your writing. No worries!
Second, you mentioned on Twitter (I'm following now btw I am @BackyardPonders) that you are looking for writing prompts? I host a series titled Free Write Friday and all my prompts are available to write for at any time. I do not use a linky tool with deadlines, I allow entrants to simply comment each post with their link so they can submit whenever they want, to past or present prompts. I hope you will stop by my blog and take a peak at some and maybe consider writing for me :)
http://magicinthebackyard.wordpress.com
Happy Monday!
Kellie Elmore
Sometimes I wonder that, too. Great poem!
ohhh think we've all been there ! great write thank you x
I really enjoyed it. Excellent word choice and good structure.
I linked to it as part of my post today. I'm trying to spread around as much link love as I can to fellow poets as part of National Poetry Month.
If anyone else here wants to share some poetry go leave a comment on my blog and I will gladly spread some more love around.
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